In class we do cold task to find out what we already know. Our cold task was narrative writing. This is a snap shot of what i can do in 30 minutes by myself.

We are learning to self -assess our writing so we know what we are good at and what we need to work on.

What I want to approve on is putting better language like figurative language and wow words in my story.

 Name: Taitokerau

Once I went to calaya’s and thems house when they used to live down in Te Iringa and I and calaya were playing on the quad having heaps of fun. Then we had to give the quad over to one of our other cousins and to my sisters Naz and Ryvi to have a turn on. So then they thought that they were cool and went for a ride on the road. So then my cousin was like oh should we go onto the rocky road and try to do some burnouts and stuff. Then my sisters were like yup if you can control the quad and my cousin said yes. SO then they went onto the rocky road suddenly!!!! My cousin thought she was cool and tried to do burnouts and she lost control of the bike and my sister Ryvi fell of the quad then she go scratched up heaps and then her leg got ran over and her cut was so deep u could see her bone in her leg and she was crying so much that she felt like her heart was gonna leave her body.